PATCHWORK WORDS: STRONGER STORY

Pretty Pirate!

We’ve all heard about how we should polish our manuscripts until they shine. Are they made of silver? And it has been said that editors are seeking the precious gem, so we should revise our manuscripts until they sparkle.

I’d like to propose an analogy of my own, “patchwork words.”

Since I’m also a quilter, as well as an author, this makes sense to me. Maybe it will be an easy way for you to revise to make your story stronger.

Your story is finished. You’ve read it and reread it a million times. Friends and critique partners have read it and given comment. You fixed the sagging middle, tied the loose ends, and cut out the unnecessary words. Now, it’s ready to submit to agents or editors.

Right?         Wrong!

I’m suggesting one last exercise before you hit the send button or seal that manila envelope. This is where the “patchwork words” come in.

VERBS:

1. Take the first and last page of each chapter.
2. Highlight the verbs you have used.
3. List them separately on a different page.
4. Use a thesaurus to find a stronger verb. (This may not always happen if you already have a strong verb)
5. Replace the weak verb and continue down the list.

ie:  original phrase – pushed forcefully against the wall.

      new phrase – slammed against the wall

      original phrase – cut deep into his shoulder

      new phrase – pierced his shoulder

     

DESCRIPTORS

1.     Repeat step one above.

2.     Highlight adjectives and adverbs with a different color from above exercise.

3.     Where you have two adjectives, cut one.

4.     Where you had adverbs, your new stronger verb should eliminate the need for the tricky adverb.

ie:  original phrase - cold, blue eyes stared

      new phrase – icy eyes stared

      original phrase – the long, twisted, cobblestone road

      new phrase – the winding road

SIMILES/METAPHORS

1.     Repeat step one above.

2.     Check for your analogies. Are they cliché? If so, change them to something more original. (The first thing you think of is usually the first thing ever other writer thinks of, so stretch your imagination to come up with something more original.)

3.     Don’t overuse analogies. (No more than one on each page, it that)

Pint-Sized Pirate!

Now go back and reread your manuscript. The new words you slipped in there should make a difference. You can tell when you get to the “patched” area because it should sound stronger.

Patchwork your way to perfection! J